After giving a presentation on our thriller opening (displayed in the powerpoint on 11/10/12), the class gave us feedback on what they thought of it. This has been very useful because we have been able to see the stronger and weaker points of our thriller's mould and this has allowed us to make amendments.
The biggest posing problem people have recognised seems to be the dialogue. What we aim to do is to shoot the two scenes separately. We will then lip-sync the cafe speaking scenes by externally recording the dialogue .The witness enters a monologue, so the use of flashbacks as he narrates will stop constant dialogue being necessary.
The idea of a 'twist' also seems misunderstood and people have suggested the use of 'red herrings' to build up tension. In a sense we already have aimed to do this. Although, the point of our twist is that the audience will learn the sudden identity of the 'head mob member' at the end of the opening. We are not simply tying the best friend of the witness as being this man immediately. It is something that will be slowly be uncovered, by clues such as shots of shoes and shaking hands on a coffee mug. However, most people liked the idea of ending on a cliff-hanger.
What people credited us most for, is the consideration we have given to a dialogue script.
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